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Bad days to come
And there is nowhere to go
I will be stairing at the sun
In the days I will never know.

Don't be fooled by these quiet times
It is the noise of a dying heart
A storm is coming soon
Be sure I will play my part

Bad days to come
Dark clouds ahead
Soon I'll stop loving you
Soon I will be dead.



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10 seconds exposure.
Tel Aviv beach, Israel

Critiques


:iconahmadhafiz:
This artwork is inspirational. I can imagine so many things by just looking at it. :)

Your writing is excellent and the artwork goes well with it.

Love the mysterious effect of this piece. Though the title says dark clouds ahead, that's not the vibe I'm getting, more like opportunities ahead (if I did not read the poem).

And talking about clouds, that's the element I don't like in this piece. Too dark maybe? It's very distracting. Another thing that can be improved on is the cropping, maybe less of the rocks at the bottom to give a more balanced composition.
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:iconhgonzag:
Firstly to critique some of your work is necessary to see your gallery and admire the quality of them.

This photo “for me” has some good and bad thinks.

In the bad thinks I found the stone to take up nearly the 50% of the photo, and although the texture is incredible defined the stone don't say nothing, I cut the photo down to the stone radius and center a bit more the stone in the frame.
The sky is so unreal, is like a negative of a sky, I don't know if the conversion to b&w create these black clouds, but I don't like it.

In the other hand the photo transmit peace and a sense of unease at the same time.
This photo spur to follow on these blur columns to the infinite, but when you arrive at the end you found the dark, "Bad days to come".

Your words to comments on are much appreciated and emphasize the photo.

Good work.Note: If you like my critique, please do the same with one of my photos ;)
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Primero para criticar tu trabajo es necesario ver tu obra antes y admirar la calidad de la misma.

Esta foto “;para mi” tiene puntos negativos y positivos.

En la parte negativa encuentro que la roca ocupa mas del 50% de la foto, y aunque la textura de la misma está increíblemente bien definida a mi no me dice nada, yo cortaría la foto por abajo hasta tocar casi con el radio de la roca además de centrarla un poco más.
El cielo es irreal, parece como si lo hubieras negativizado, no se si ha sido la conversión al b&n lo que a creado esas nubes negras, pero no me gustan.

Por otro lado la foto transmite paz e intranquilidad al mismo tiempo.
La foto te empuja a seguir las columnas metidas en la niebla hasta el infinito, pero cuando llegas al final encuentras la oscuridad, “Días malos por venir”.

Buen trabajo.

Nota: Si te ha gustado mi comentario, por favor comenta una de mis fotos ;)
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:wow:

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All God does is watch us and kill us when we get boring. We must never, ever be boring.

Give me anything in this whole fucking world that is exactly what it looks like!

-Invisible Monsters
, Chuck Palahniuk

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:iconmaticgolob:
Wonderful!
greath contrast and greath composition:heart:


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:iconshaketheshame:
This is incredible. It makes you feel like the remnants of the dock are floating in the sky.

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"What's wrong with a man wantin' another man to touch his beads?"
Robert Downey, Jr.

Hungry?
:iconwierden:
amazing , can't get enough!
:+fav: ofc , such a great shot!

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The world isn't a perfect place , but it's there for us , there to see it , to touch it , to feel it and that's why the world is so damn beautiful
:iconbear48:
You are so far beyound what I can do that I feel unworthy to critique you

wonderful work

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St. Francis said,
“A man who uses his hands is a laborer. One who uses his hands and mind is a craftsman. He who uses his hands, and his mind, and his heart is an artist.”
:iconseffis:
Love it! The mood is so calming and quiet, and the black and white suits the picture perfectly. Great work as always Gilad! :)

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:iconkimura-shinjiru:
It is an amazing moment of time you've captured there.

Although, it does kind of bug me how it is slightly off center.

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"The only thing dependable about the future is uncertainty."
:iconjoh-oh-oh:
Damn. That's... that's... amazing. :heart:

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NIKON CORPORATION
NIKON D70
100/10 second
F/25.0
25 mm
Jun 8, 2004, 8:05:26 PM

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