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You may think the sun is all good, but I beg the differ.
I say damn that sun!

It was a plain, regular morning for me.
Woke up, drank some coffee, a latte.
Read in the newspaper of the disaster in some third world country, the murder in a local club, some terrorist bombing and a few killed… nothing much. I was beginning to feel pressed with time, and so I ran out to the car, when the strong sun outside caught me by surprise. I was blinded for a second, when I bumped into the elderly man walking the street.
I couldn't apologize more, when he fell down, probably breaking some ribs on the sidewalk, just outside my home.
Damn that sun.
I would have stayed, to see he is Ok, or even called an ambulance from my cell phone, but I was late for work. It's a silly excuse, but it was the sun fault.

So I was driving with the damn sun in my eyes, cursing that ball of fire to the best of my knowledge, when I came to the junction of streets I had to cross, to get into my office parking. It was the sun again, that was in my eyes, when I entered the parking, scratching the wall enough to paint it with the color my car used to be.
Damn that sun.
If I wasn't so pissed, I would probably continued to my office, and work, but I just had to get a break, after starting my day like this.

So I left my beat up car there, and held up my hand for a cab, to take me some place to relax. The sun was on my back, and I felt a sweat beginning to crawl down the back of my shirt. When finally I got into a cab, my shirt was glued to my stomach and I looked like I had a shower, but smelled like I didn’t.
Damn that sun.
If I had any brains I would have taken the cab home, and changed, but I was so irritated, that I asked the driver:
"Just take me as far away from the sun, as you can"
"Away from the sun sir?"
he asked.
"Yes" I replied. "Away from that damn sun"
"I can get you away from the sun, sir. It will cost you, sir" he said, while checking me in his rear view mirror.
"That would be fine" I mumbled, just wishing I can relax somewhere, before feeling this sun again.
The driver took the high road, and it seemed like he was driving directly at the sun. I didn't say anything, though it worried me. We were driving for ten minutes, when I finally asked him:
"Why are going in the direction of the sun, when all I asked was to get away from it"
"Well sir, I'm driving the sun away. It is a known fact that when driving directly at the sun, the sun tries to get away, like a criminal, that knows he got caught."
I thought I was going mad…
"Listen, I'm not a small infantile you can work on. I asked you a simple task, and you are doing exactly the opposite"
"Oh no sir, trust me. If you want to get away from the sun, you got into the right cab"
I didn't trust him, but I still liked the idea of someone else taking control of the situation. I could close my eyes, and imagine I'm in the dead of winter, snow falling on top of my home, on the elderly man smiling outside my house, covering my parking space at work with white layer of "untisun". Falling on me…
Damn that sun.
I was so busy imagining a world without the sun, I fell asleep in the cab.

When I opened my eyes, I didn't see the sun anymore.
I was still in the cab, driving on a flat road. Outside it was darker, and when I looked around, I saw the damn sun behind us.
"Oh sir, you woke up. Did you sleep well in my cab?"
"Yes, thank you"
"You see sir, I promised you the sun will run from us, and she did. It was a struggle, but as soon as she saw we were not going to back off, she went over us, and landed on the other side of my cab. Soon she will set, and you won't see the sun at all"
"Good work. Where are we?"
"We are 30 minutes from where I picked you this morning, sir"
"Good. Good"

Half an hour later, he dropped me at work, near my beat-up car. I gave the cab driver about a month of my salary, for escaping the sun, and felt like a complete fool.
Damn that sun.
It was the worst day in my life, and all cause of it.
I will have to work to pay for this day, for a long time. I can't believe what a sunny day caused me to do.

I left the car there, and decided to walk off the rest of my frustration.
I stopped at a small park, and sat on a bench, with the sun fading behind me.
A sense of victory came over me. I felt though loosing some battles, I have won the war with the sun. Here I am at the end of the day, relaxing in the park, and there she is, fading and disappearing into the night. It felt good.
Two minutes later someone crashed into me, flying with his Rollerblades right on me, and throwing me to the bushes. He tried to explain that he's sorry, and blaa blaa, but I knew…
I lifted my head from the bushes, and there she was…
Damn that sun
A short story, about choosing your battles in life :D
It was the photo that brought the idea for the story.
I hope that my English writing is not shabby, and you will still be able to enjoy the story.
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FireOfTheFox Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
xD Holy fudging shiz xDDD I love the way you narrate; it seems really natural.
Tobiisagoodboy1123 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009
I think we all hate the sun just as well.
Ohbradley Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2009
The grammar is a bit clumsy and I don't understand why this is under the 'non-fiction' section when it is clearly fiction.

I honestly didn't enjoy the story because at times the descriptions and language seemed forced, it was obvious that even though this is popular, it's probably not your best work.
brianop87 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008
Your conversation with the taxi driver was hilarious hahahaha...bravo!
prajjwal19 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
damn that sun.. cool.. =)
FasleReality Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2008   Writer
your English was great, great story, I had to read it
BeautifullyFlawed Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2008
Your English was quite good, sir. I liked the story, very nice.
hhryah Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008
Overall, I really liked it! It had a great narrative voice, vivid imagery and characterization, and an endearingly poignant quirky concept. The only thing I'd really point out are the grammatical errors. I nitpick, so please forgive me, but I like it when people correct my German, so I'll just point out a few little things to maybe remember when writing in English next time. Otherwise, the grammar and flow was just perfect!

I beg the differ.
I beg to differ, is the correct phrase. :)

the sun fault.
Sun's fault.

to the best of my knowledge
To the best of my ability, is the actual phrase.

I would probably continued to my office
I would probably have continued to my office.

Leaving off punctuation with the dialogue could work stylistically, so I won't bother with inserting commas here and there. :P

checking me
Checking on me.

though loosing some battles
Though losing (one "o") some battles.

Really though, great feel to the story and great creativity!
thaez Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2008
very familiar idea about choosing the battles in life, very familiar idea about blaming the sun as example :)) (i see myself all over the screen in those words right now)
Bebecca Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008  Professional Interface Designer

Amazing work!!

:clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:
hiphopflavor Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
"choosing your battles in life"
this story really helps me out :)
now before i enter any battle i'll think about how overwhelming it can get, and so i'll decide whether i can win the battle, and thus "charge", or whether i can't, and thus just benefit of my "enemy" :)
thank you :aww:!
PreciousDafna Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008
nice story...
so true. amazing what stupid things we're willing to do to escape the sun, and other disturbing things in our lives.
Simounet Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing story Gilad...
RhannaWindMage Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your English is fine. The story is definitely amusing! It reminds me of Meursault from The Stranger by Albert Camus.
leventis Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2008   Photographer
Poor sun....
At least you paid out your debt to the guy you fell on in the morning... :)
Triez777 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2008   Photographer
Love the creativity of the story accompanied by the picture. :)
broto Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2008
Great composition, the cab driver is really a well structured character. I don't understand if ther's no battle in life, if it's impossible to win our battles or if that doesn't matter. The sun with his omnipresence and invincibility is the perfect enemy for this story. Also I like so much the repetition of "damn that sun", that creates a strong sense of frustation in the reader. Beautiful and funny.
endless-sacrifice Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2008
This really amused me
I hate the sun, personally!!
So this was great ;P
Really well written, I loved it :heart:
ximcharmedx Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2008   Writer
lol that was really different, but i liked it a lot! great pic, too!
IndusGoth Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2008
we are craving for the sun right now... after what the typhoon did to our group of islands here in the Philippines... :D but yeah.. damn that sun... :D
TheDoorOfTime Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008
Great!interesting concept!
JFSmade Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008
Dude thats great! I loved the story. The picture is really nice but actually nothing compared to the fun i had reading. Thanks~
vahpuu Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008
that was quite beautiful. i could picture each moment of it :)
MuteSerenity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008
Your story made me laugh and smile. I love stories that can do that for me, even about simple things!
Amazing and insightful story, and wonderful photography.
TakaniS Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2008
You're writing stlye flows a lot like poetry, but that's most of what I've seen you writing, so it makes sense.
Mayonaka-Hoshi Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2008
Wow amazing story!!! And amazing photo. This is incredible :D
autumn-wind Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
the story was really really interesting and intriguing in a way =)
and i love the photo.
great piece!
jadedbutterflie Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
Beautiful image! Absolutely gorgeous!
the-butterfly-ninja Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
LOL! love that story!
themusicain Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
nicely done! i'm just back from a band trip to france, and on saturday it was about 37 degrees celcius, and loads of people were getting heatstroke and just generally feeling crap, so it was a relief to get back to scotland today! :) i can seriously sympathise here
gilad Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008  Professional Photographer
stargirlDD Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
I hate when the sun makes me do that! Great story.
Astarlen Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008   Photographer
hehehehe... funny how little things get us so irritated when they tend to pile up :S
hanaemori Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
Ha how crazy cool, I loved your story, and the picture is amazing!
doomXtongue Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
i love the story :love:
absinthe-kitty Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
That was a really fun story :D For a second, I thought it was an actual experience, but either way, it was very creative :)

I guess too much of everything is never good. XD
iarebored Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008  Professional Filmographer
Quite funny :3 It made me smile.
zimchar Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
jhonstrinov Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Sweet :D
BlackAndWhiteInColor Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008   Photographer
wonderful pic & story!
loved it = ]
Amythos Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008  Professional Photographer
wonderful! I loved it!
Glad to see you posting more than just awesomely GREAT photos!
Now we get magnificent short stories as well!!
NikolasFilth Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
That was a awsome story your english is good and I love the picture.
jennarosa Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
one word:
8ClockworkPurple8 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is acually a good short story! Think you'll write another one soon?
Denierim Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Your English is well in this piece and it truly is understandable. As a writer-wannabe I really love this story. It's unique, it's entertaining and everything a story should be, especially one this short (I'm starting to envy you more because I can't write short stories...). I just smiled all the way through this and it really speaks the truth. There's a lot of battles in life that we need to win and a lot of them that we will loose. We just need to keep on fighting.

You did a wonderful work with this and got one more fan for your writing. :)
Liesjuh Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008  Student General Artist
Haha, thats amazing!

I always enjoy your writing. So keep it up! :D
jesse-botanical Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
well writen sir
really well writen
Kianha Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
Very nice story. The photograph ties in wonderfully with the moral. As always keep up the amazing work. :)
Bozar88 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2008
i like it, you're a very good writer! :)
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